Feedback for The Proposal:
- Perhaps your abstract could be more specific on the method you will use to carry out the research
- Perhaps include some graphics or pictures for interest?
- You are tending to just keep mentioning a load of reference material and commenting on it. Use the material to construct your own argument or case.
- The impression at times is that your method will be to read a lot of stuff and expect some kind of idea to emerge
- Explain your methods - if you are doing a case study then explain why you chose this and what you are looking for.
- Be more explicit about the methods - you mention media tests which sound important but you simply cast them as a style of practice led research. This is equivalent to saying "I'm going to do a bit of quantitative research"
a summary of the feedback:
find conflict in the subject
explain latter research material in more detail - how it will inform the development of ideas
Case studies - select and justify
Media tests - explain their role and justify
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